Rosina ([info]karla_yonit) wrote,
2006-06-20 17:53:00
Laertes/Hamlet in eight 20-word pieces, for Soujin.


1. Rosencrantz and Guildenstern are always together because Rosencrantz cannot remember. Laertes and Hamlet avoid each other because they cannot forget.

2. "Good night, brother," whispers exhausted Hamlet to Laertes, before falling asleep. (And he condemns his mother for her incestuous marriage!)

3. Ophelia cannot play today, so Hamlet (the King) faces the unfortunate lack of a Queen. Laertes is an unwilling substitute.

4. Hamlet's poetry to Ophelia is awful. His poetry to Laertes is better, but he will never give it to him.

5. They cannot tangle on the ground, as the common youths, wrestling, do. They keep a foil's length between them, until--

6. Laertes smiles secretly, almost bitterly, hearing his father caution his sister against Lord Hamlet. It is too late for him.

7. This last match will be different: they will not kiss (not even a quick kiss) and make up (love) after.

8. While everyone drinks, honoring their departures, they clutch fiercely in another room. Laertes hisses into Hamlet's mouth "Forget me not."

(Sarabande) by Handel.

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[info]fajrdrako

June 21 2006, 03:09:42 UTC 5 years ago

Oh, very nice! Poignant and strong.

[info]gileonnen

June 21 2006, 03:40:42 UTC 5 years ago

. . . I LOVE it! Nothing more to be said (and yet I shall say it anyway); I am not-so-slowly-at-all becoming a fan of Laertes fics, and this one is particularly powerful (in part because the detached formatting only emphasizes the passion of the fragments). Great job!

[info]watergal

June 21 2006, 04:00:27 UTC 5 years ago

Oh, very pretty little tasty bits. Thank you for sharing.

[info]ego_magnificent

June 21 2006, 05:21:54 UTC 5 years ago

leartes is one of my favorites. and hamlet definently my favorite shakespearean tragedy. thank you

[info]sandrine

June 21 2006, 17:44:58 UTC 5 years ago

That's brilliant! Very strong writing, and so much said in so few words. :)

[info]virginie_m

June 22 2006, 01:23:48 UTC 5 years ago

Wow, this is really intriguing. I don't remember much about Hamlet but it makes me want to read it again. And the whole thing is wonderfully understated yet brimming with feeling, culminating in your perfect final two sentences.

[info]cbizkit

June 22 2006, 01:30:28 UTC 5 years ago

WOW. "Hisses". This is great.

[info]karla_yonit

June 22 2006, 01:55:14 UTC 5 years ago

Er, yes. The word doesn't work, you think?

[info]cbizkit

June 22 2006, 01:57:23 UTC 5 years ago

Umm? I meant that I was impressed by it. It's very like Laertes to be all angry and passionate even at a romantic moment.

[info]karla_yonit

June 22 2006, 02:00:20 UTC 5 years ago

Oh. :D Glad it works.

Hi John Dickinson!

[info]sing_hosanna

June 22 2006, 02:05:15 UTC 5 years ago

XP

Hello. Damn these people and their instant knowledge of every error in posting that happens, due to their technologically insane "email" and such!

...I trust you stand against independency?

[info]cbizkit

June 22 2006, 02:08:22 UTC 5 years ago

(yes, i am sort of covertly running a 1776 RPG, because my real-life friends on my friends list, i think, would think i was nuts if they knew. >__> want to join?)

[info]karla_yonit

June 22 2006, 14:56:03 UTC 5 years ago

(nah, but thanks for inviting me. already in two other rpgs and i don't want rp-ing to eat my brain.)

[info]cbizkit

June 22 2006, 20:37:17 UTC 5 years ago

(hehehe, that's okay. i'm actually not in any, because I was going to be in desperatefans, then had no idea how to do the chat thing. heh.)

[info]karla_yonit

June 22 2006, 20:47:21 UTC 5 years ago

(But DF is fun! You don't need chat; I don't have it either.)

[info]karla_yonit

June 22 2006, 15:02:01 UTC 5 years ago

...I'm from New York. I abstain. Courteously.

[info]sing_hosanna

June 22 2006, 20:36:14 UTC 5 years ago

Oh. New York. *mumbles something about damn indecisive New Yorkers* It's lucky for you, madam, that I am not John Hancock.

[info]lauzeta

June 24 2006, 05:16:48 UTC 5 years ago

This is lovely, especially 1, 3, and 4.

(I'm also a huge fan of your icon - do you mind telling me who the artist is?)

[info]karla_yonit

June 24 2006, 14:03:25 UTC 5 years ago

Thanks! The icon's from "Omnia Vanitas" by William Dyce, found at artrenewal.org. (I make most of my icons from the art there.)

[info]lauzeta

June 28 2006, 07:15:11 UTC 5 years ago

Man, I've been meaning to say thanks for a while now. So, um, thanks! That is an awesome site.
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